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Writing Challenge – Story #15 – Ghostbusters 2

notes:
1. the Ghostbusters are under a judicial restraining order that strictly prevents them from performing services as paranormal investigators or eliminators.
2. Egon has been studying the affects of human emotion on the physical environment

Vigo, the Carpathian
1. weakness/need – needs to not be evil and not plan to take over the world
1A. problem –
2. desire – to inhabit the body of a child and take over the world, making it evil
3. opponent – The Ghostbusters
4. plan – to get Yanosh to get him a baby to inhabit, then become the evil ruler of the world at the stroke of midnight on New Year’s Eve
5. battle – tries to inhabit Oscar, the baby
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – is destroyed from this realm and the painting

Dana Barrett
1. weakness/need – needs to reassess her failed relationship with Peter
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants to save her baby, Oscar, from whatever supernatural power is out to get him
3. opponent – Vigo
4. plan – go to the Ghostbusters, but not include Peter
5. battle – concedes to allow Peter into the investigation
6. self-revelation – she still has feelings for Peter
7. new equilibrium – in a relationship with Peter

Peter
1. weakness/need – needs to reassess how he treated Dana while they were going out
1A. problem – career as a Ghostbuster is over, now hosts a ridiculous psychic show
2. desire – wants to save Dana’s baby and the world from Vigo
3. opponent – Vigo
4. plan – investigate what is going on with the baby and Vigo
5. battle – uses positively charged and slimed Statue of Liberty to generate enough positive energy to prevent Vigo from ruling the world
6. self-revelation – he needs to treat Dana better
7. new equilibrium – in a relationship with Dana

Egon
1. weakness/need – needs to socialize with humans more, instead of just studying them
1A. problem – career as a Ghostbuster is over, now doing scientific research on mood and environment
2. desire – wants to save Dana’s baby and the world from Vigo
3. opponent – Vigo
4. plan – investigate what is going on with the baby and Vigo
5. battle – uses positively charged and slimed Statue of Liberty to generate enough positive energy to prevent Vigo from ruling the world
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – needs to socialize with humans more, instead of just studying them

Ray
1. weakness/need – needs to be less naive
1A. problem – career as a Ghostbuster is over, now owns an occult book shop and moonlights as a children’s party entertainer
2. desire – wants to save Dana’s baby and the world from Vigo
3. opponent – Vigo
4. plan – investigate what is going on with the baby and Vigo
5. battle – uses positively charged and slimed Statue of Liberty to generate enough positive energy to prevent Vigo from ruling the world
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – needs to be less naive

Winston
1. weakness/need – needs to believe in the river of mood slime
1A. problem – career as a Ghostbuster is over, now moonlights as a children’s party entertainer
2. desire – wants to save Dana’s baby and the world from Vigo
3. opponent – Vigo
4. plan – investigate what is going on with the baby and Vigo
5. battle – sees the river of slime, is thrust into it, and upon getting out is ready to kill Ray
6. self -revelation – believes in the river of mood slime
7. new equilibrium – tries to convince others in the river of mood slime

Jack Hardemeyer, the mayor’s assistant
1. weakness/need – needs to believe in the Ghostbusters
1A. problem –
2. desire – to keep the Ghostbusters away from the mayor because of his re-election campaign
3. opponent – Ghostbusters
4. plan – to commit the Ghostbusters to a mental institution so they won’t go to the press
5. battle – commits the Ghostbusters to a mental institution so they won’t go to the press
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – fired and removed from building

Louis Tulley
1. weakness/need – needs self esteem
1A. problem –
2. desire – to save NYC
3. opponent – Vigo
4. plan – to dress up as a Ghostbuster and go to the museum with a proton pack
5. battle – he battles the negatively charged mood slime
6. self-revelation – he gains self esteem
7. new equilibrium – he helps the Ghostbusters save NYC

Yanosh (Dana’s boss and Vigo’s minion)
1. weakness/need – needs to stop submitting to dark lords
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants to date (or marry) Dana and serve Vigo
3. opponent – Dana
4. plan – to get a Dana’s baby, Oscar, for Vigo and convince Vigo to let him have Dana as a wife
5. battle – when Vigo appears and tells him to get him a baby, Yanosh simply agrees (no real battle)
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – covered in positively charged mood slime

Judge Stephen Wexler (a.k.a. the Hammer)
1. weakness/need – needs to believe in ghosts and, consequently, the Ghostbusters
1A. problem –
2. desire – to prevent himself from dying at the hands of the ghosts of the Scaleri brothers
3. opponent – the Scaleri brothers
4. plan – to get the Ghostbusters to capture the Scaleri brothers
5. battle – he decides to rescind the restraining order legally preventing the Ghostbusters from investigating or eliminating ghosts in order to save his own life from the Scaleri brothers, ghosts of 2 brothers who tried and convicted to the electric chair
6. self-revelation – ghosts do exist
7. new equilibrium – believes in ghosts and the Ghostbusters

NYC (fake opponent)
1. weakness/need – hate the Ghostbusters
1A. problem – they believe that hating everyone they meet is their God given right
2. desire – to get rid of the mood slime that has covered the museum on New Year’s Eve
3. opponent – Vigo
4. plan – none
5. battle – to gather around the mood slime on New Year’s Eve
6. self-revelation – the Ghostbusters remind them that their goodness will overcome any evil
7. new equilibrium – love the Ghostbusters again

Janine again serves a minor role in this movie and isn’t given much of a character arc.

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Writing Challenge – Story #14 – Ghostbusters

Rules of science:
1. don’t cross the streams
2. if you want to reverse the flow into the other dimension, then you can cross the streams

Gozer, a Sumerian god
1. weakness/need – died many years ago
1A. problem –
2. desire – to enter the human realm
3. opponent – the Ghostbusters
4. plan – use the building which channels spirits to manifest the Gatekeeper and the Key Master, who will then allow Gozer back into the human realm
5. battle – manifests the Marshmallow Man to destroy the Ghostbusters and NYC
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – destruction

Peter
1. weakness/need – needs to stop womanizing
1A. problem –
2. desire – to stop Gozer from entering the human realm
3. opponent – Gozer
4. plan – to learn everything he can about Gozer and prevent the Gatekeeper and Key Master from meeting
5. battle – will not have sex with Dana while she’s possessed by Zuul, the Gatekeeper
6. self-revelation – has feelings for Dana and also has standards
7. new equilibrium – in a relationship with Dana

Ray
1. weakness/need – needs to stop being naive
1A. problem –
2. desire – to stop Gozer from entering the human realm
3. opponent – Gozer
4. plan – to learn everything he can about Gozer and prevent the Gatekeeper and Key Master from meeting
5. battle – battles the Marshmallow Man, who was sent by Gozer, the Destructor
6. self-revelation – none (no character growth)
7. new equilibrium – continues to be naive

Egon
1. weakness/need – needs to learn to socialize with people
1A. problem –
2. desire – to stop Gozer from entering the human realm
3. opponent – Gozer
4. plan – to learn everything he can about Gozer and prevent the Gatekeeper and Key Master from meeting
5. battle – battles the Marshmallow Man, who was sent by Gozer, the Destructor
6. self-revelation – none (no character growth)
7. new equilibrium – continues to be awkward with people

Winston
1. weakness/need – needs to believe in ghosts and other worldly creatures
1A. problem –
2. desire – to have a steady paycheck
3. opponent – [i don’t believe he has a clear opponent]
4. plan – get a steady paying job and do whatever they ask of him
5. battle – catches ghosts for a living and, as such, sees things he never would have believed
6. self-revelation – he believes in ghosts
7. new equilibrium – he swears to the mayor of NYC that ghosts exist

Dana Barrett
1. weakness/need – needs to be upfront with men she doesn’t want to date
1A. problem – her apartment is haunted (specifically, she has the corner apartment in a building built by a cult member who wanted to bring ancient spirits into this realm)
2. desire – to get to the bottom of what is happening in her apartment
3. opponent – Zuul, a minion of Gozer
4. plan – go to the Ghostbusters and have them research and run tests
5. battle – Zuul shows up in her apartment and traps her
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – she becomes the Gatekeeper

Mr. Peck, EPA employee
1. weakness/need – needs to let go of his bureaucratic nonsense and allow the Ghostbusters to do their job
1A. problem –
2. desire – to shut down the Ghostbusters and prove them as frauds
3. opponent – the Ghostbusters
4. plan – to discredit and dismantle the Ghostbusters
5. battle – tries to convince the mayor of NYC that the Ghostbusters are fakes
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – thrown out of mayor’s office

Janine plays a minor role, but doesn’t have an arc. Louis Tully, Dana’s annoying accountant neighbor also doesn’t have an arc. He becomes the Key Master once he’s possessed by an other worldly being.

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Writing Challenge – Story #13 – Amadeus

Mozart
1. weakness/need – needs to stop womanizing and drinking and act like an adult
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants to be a child and a genius
3. opponent – Salieri
4. plan – to work and play all the time
5. battle – he knows the funeral piece is killing him, yet he continues to work on it for the money
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – he dies

Salieri (fake ally)
1. weakness/need – needs to let go of his jealousy of Mozart
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants to be the most gifted musician ever
3. opponent – Mozart
4. plan – to take Mozart apart bit by bit, then dress as his father (come back from the grave) and ask him to write music for a funeral, kill Mozart, and perform the music at his funeral (as his own genius creation)
5. battle – he tells Mozart that the man dressed as his father will pay him extra money if he finishes the funeral piece by the next night and offers to help him write it, even though Mozart is clearly ill and needs to rest
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – he kills Mozart

Mozart’s dad
1. weakness/need – needs to stop pushing Mozart
1A. problem – his son, Mozart, is childish, even if he’s gifted
2. desire – wants Mozart to have the best life possible
3. opponent – Mozart’s wife
4. plan – to live with Mozart and his wife and influence their life for the better
5. battle – Mozart’s wife argues with him for control of their home life
6. self-revelation – it’s Mozart’s life, not his
7. new equilibrium – he leaves their home

Mozart’s wife
1. weakness/need – needs to not be so desperate for money
1A. problem –
2. desire – money
3. opponent – Salieri
4. plan – to do anything for money
5. battle – she tells Salieri to leave the house and forbids Mozart from working on the funeral piece, which is one of the only paid gigs he has
6. self-revelation – her husband’s health is more important than money
7. new equilibrium – she tries to save her husband, but is too late

maid
1. weakness/need – needs to stop accepting bribes in exchange for spying on Mozart
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants extra cash
3. opponent – Salieri
4. plan – to get paid to tell Salieri what Mozart does everyday
5. battle – she watches Mozart slowly kill himself
6. self-revelation – she can no longer work for Salieri and watch Mozart kill himself
7. new equilibrium – she no longer works as Mozart’s maid

 

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Writing Challenge – Story #12 – Frozen

Elsa (ally)
ghost – accidentally froze Anna’s head while they were kids and promised she’d control her powers and hide them from everyone, even though they’ve been getting stronger
1. weakness/need – needs to learn command of her powers
1A. problem – Elsa accidentally thrust Arendelle into an eternal winter and struck her sister, Anna, with a lethal dose of ice magic
2. desire – to not hurt anyone with her powers
3. opponent – Prince Hans
4. plan – to repress her powers, or to live in exile, because she can’t learn to control her magic
5. battle – does she live in fear of her people learning of her powers or does she live in isolation so she can embrace her powers and not hurt people
6. self-revelation – it is her fear that’s driven her to freeze her land, but her love will thaw it
7. new equilibrium – she lives in harmony with the people of Arendelle as their Ice Queen

Anna (hero)
1. weakness/need – needs to understand the real nature of true love
1A. problem – Elsa’s magic needs to be undone, because it’s brought eternal winter to Arendelle and struck Anna’s heart with a lethal dose of ice
2. desire – wants to find a way to reverse Elsa’s magic
3. opponent – Prince Hans
4. plan – tries everything she can to save Arendelle and herself
5. battle – does she save herself with the hope of true love’s kiss (from Kristoff) or does she save her sister, Elsa, who is about to be killed by Prince Hans
6. self-revelation – the true love she’s looking for is in her relationship with her sister, Elsa
7. new equilibrium – she saves everyone by sacrificing herself for her sister, thus teaching her sister that love is stronger than fear

Prince Hans of the Southern Isles (fake ally)
1. weakness/need – needs to stop manipulating others to get a throne
1A. problem – he is 13th in line to the throne in his own land
2. desire – wants to be King of Arendelle
3. opponent – Anna
4. plan – to romance/con Anna, marry her, and inherit the throne, kill the sisters, and become king
5. battle – he succeeds in convincing Elsa that she killed her own sister, but fails to kill either sister, due to Anna’s sacrifice
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – he’s imprisoned (?) and sent back to his homeland

Kristof (ally)
1. weakness/need – needs to socialize with more than just reindeer and trolls
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants to help Anna find a way to reverse Elsa’s magic
3. opponent – Prince Hans
4. plan – he has no plan, he just follows everyone else’s advice
5. battle – he battles to get Anna to Prince Hans (to save her life) and then leave her there
6. self-revelation – he loves Anna
7. new equilibrium – he dates (?) Anna

Olaf (ally)
1. weakness/need – needs to understand what happens to snow in heat
1A. problem –
2. desire – to help his friends
3. opponent – any season other than winter
4. plan – to help his friends on their quest
5. battle – helps save Anna and Arendelle from the eternal winter, despite realizing he’s going to melt
6. self-revelation – his friends help him in return
7. new equilibrium – Elsa gives him his own personal flurry

Duke of Weselton (opponent)
1. weakness/need – needs to stop trying to unlock Arendelle’s secrets and exploit its riches
1A. problem – the doors of the palace are always locked and the royal family is secretive
2. desire – wants to unlock Arendelle’s secrets and exploit its riches
3. opponent – Elsa
4. plan – to make it appear like Elsa and Anna are evil monsters, or kill them
5. battle – sends his goons to kill Elsa but she is too powerful for any of them
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – Queen Elsa decrees that Arendelle no longer trades with Weselton

 

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Writing Challenge – Story #11 – Wreck It Ralph

Ralph
1. weakness/need – needs to realize that he’s in the right place
1A. problem – everyone treats him like he’s worthless
2. desire – wants to win the respect of his peers and be seen as an equal, not a bad guy
3. opponent – Turbo
4. plan – go to different games to see if he can win a medal
5. battle – sacrifices himself to create a beacon so that Vanellope can live
6. self-revelation – he is a hero, with or without the title
7. new equilibrium – others appreciate him for who he is

Fix-It Felix, Jr.
1. weakness/need – needs to realize that just because he’s the hero, he doesn’t hold the game together
1A. problem – Ralph has gone “Turbo” and gone over to another game abandoning the Fix-It Felix game
2. desire – wants his game to work properly and not be unplugged
3. opponent – Ralph
4. plan – to go into the other games and get Ralph back before his game is unplugged
5. battle – he argues with Ralph over how miserable he feels outside of his own game and finally finds a use for his fixing ability when he fixes Vanellope’s car in exchange for Ralph returning to the game and never leaving again
6. self-revelation – he realizes how miserable every day of Ralph’s life (being rejected and feeling like a criminal)
7. new equilibrium – he shares his fame with Ralph

Turbo (a.k.a. King Candy)
ghost – was in love with attention and got jealous of another game, so he hopped games and consequently got both games unplugged
1. weakness/need – needs to step down from the throne he’s stolen
1A. problem – Vanellope will not stop trying to get to her rightful place
2. desire – wants to hold onto the Vanellope’s throne
3. opponent – Vanellope
4. plan – turn Princess Vanellope into a glitch and make it illegal for her to race (saying it’s for her own good)
5. battle – he battles Vanellope during the race and his identity as Turbo is revealed
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – he becomes a cybug/Turbo hybrid and dies with the rest of the cybugs when he goes into the light/beacon (b/c he dies outside of his game, he does not regenerate)

Vanellope
1. weakness/need – needs to resume her proper place in the game
1A. problem – she’s a glitch and it’s therefore illegal for her to race
2. desire – wants to be a racer
3. opponent – King Candy a.k.a. Turbo
4. plan – uses Ralph’s medal to enter a race and get Ralph to help her build a real car
5. battle – uses her power of glitching to save Ralph, then crosses the finish line
6. self-revelation – when she crosses the finish line, her rightful identity as Princess Vanellope is revealed
7. new equilibrium – even though she’s Princess, she races anyway because that’s what she loves doing and people love her glitching

Calhoun
ghost – her fiance died at their wedding
1. weakness/need – needs to get over her fiance’s death
1A. problem – one of the cybugs from her game has gone into “Sugar Rush”
2. desire – wants to prevent the cybug before it destroys “Sugar Rush” and the rest of the arcade
3. opponent – cybug
4. plan – to search for and destroy the cybug and all of its eggs
5. battle – battles a hive of cybugs and doesn’t freak out when Felix kisses her
6. self-revelation – she loves Felix
7. new equilibrium – she marries Felix and there are no bugs in sight

Qberts
ghost – their game was unplugged and they never found a new home
new equilibrium – they were asked to help destroy and fix things in the bonus round, thus making “Fix-It Felix, Jr” more popular than before

 

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Writing Challenge – Story #10 – Die Hard

I’ve been eager to analyze this one, as it’s not what anyone expects it to be.

John McClane
1. weakness/need – needs to support his wife in her career
1A. problem – company Christmas party has just been taken over by thieves/terrorists
2. desire – wants to get his wife and all of the people in Nakatomi Plaza to safety
3. opponent – Hans Gruber
4. plan – to kill them off one by one, until he gets to the boss
5. battle – showdown between John and Hans where John shoots Hans and releases Holly’s rolex (which represents her choosing a life different from her husband) in order for Hans to fall out the window
6. self-revelation – he should’ve supported his wife’s career
7. new equilibrium – he saved himself, his wife, and most of the people in Nakatomi Plaza

Holly McClane/Gennaro
1. weakness/need – needs to acknowledge that she loves her husband (she’s even stopped using his last name)
1A. problem – company Christmas party has just been taken over by thieves/terrorists
2. desire – wants to get herself, her husband, and all of the people in Nakatomi Plaza to safety
3. opponent – Hans Gruber
4. plan – once she becomes the highest ranking person in the room, she wants the concerns of the employees met by Hans and his men
5. battle – showdown between John and Hans where John shoots Hans and releases Holly’s rolex (which represents her choosing a life different from her husband) in order for Hans to fall out the window
6. self-revelation – she loves her husband (as is evident when she takes his last name again)
7. new equilibrium – she, her family, and most of the people in Nakatomi Plaza are safe

Mr. Takagi
1. weakness/need –
1A. problem – company Christmas party has just been taken over by thieves/terrorists
2. desire – wants to protect his people and his company
3. opponent – Hans
4. plan –
5. battle – refuses to give up the code
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – shot and killed by Hans

Ellis
1. weakness/need – needs to stop glorifying himself
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants to play hero
3. opponent – Hans
4. plan – to make friends with Hans by claiming he knows John then saving the day
5. battle – Hans shoots him because he thinks that he’s friends with John
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – killed by Hans

Hans Gruber
1. weakness/need – needs to stop robbing and killing people
1A. problem – there’s a trained professional in the building that is attacking his people one by one
2. desire – wants money
3. opponent – John McClane
4. plan – to hold the company hostage, and get through the 7 codes (also getting help from the FBI) and rob the company of bonds
5. battle – showdown between John and Hans where John shoots Hans and releases Holly’s rolex (which represents her choosing a life different from her husband) in order for Hans to fall out the window
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – falls off Nakatomi Plaza

Sgt. Al Powell (ally)
ghost – killed a kid and hasn’t picked up his gun since
1. weakness/need – needs to get back on the street
1A. problem -Nakatomi Plaza has just been taken over by thieves/terrorists
2. desire – to get the terrorists/thieves out of Nakatomi Plaza without anyone else getting hurt
3. opponent – Dwayne Robinson
4. plan – work with John McClane, whom he suspects is a cop
5. battle – shoots terrorist to save John’s life
6. self-revelation – he can pick up a gun to defend people’s lives because his mistakes don’t define him
7. new equilibrium – he can get back on the street again, if he chooses

Deputy Police Chief Dwayne T. Robinson
1. weakness/need – needs to concede that rank doesn’t make him right
1A. problem – John McClane won’t surrender control of the situation at Nakatomi Plaza to him, even though he’s the ranking officer in the jurisdiction
2. desire – wants to be in charge of the situation
3. opponent – FBI agents
4. plan – to send in police and negotiate with the terrorists
5. battle – tells the FBI he’s in charge because he’s the highest rank
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – is forced to hand over control by FBI agent who outrank him

reporter, Richard Thornburg (fake ally)
1. weakness/need – needs to stop comprising the safety of others in exchange for getting exclusive coverage and high ratings
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants to cover the story and get exclusives
3. opponent – McClane family
4. plan – get to Nakatomi Plaza first and get information on John McClane
5. battle – threatens Mrs. McClane’s maid with deportation unless he gets to interview the McClane children, thus endangering their wellbeing as well as Mrs. McClane’s
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – Holly McClane punches him in the face on TV

FBI Agents
1. weakness/need – need to learn to think for themselves, instead of just following the FBI handbook
1A. problem –
2. desire – to kill the terrorists
3. opponent – Hans
4. plan – double cross Hans by telling him that his demands have been met, then shooting the terrorists once they’re allowed on the roof to transport the hostages
5. battle – even though they plan on double-crossing Hans, Hans double-crosses them first and detonates enough C4 on the rooftop to kill them
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – they die in a plane explosion

Karl
1. weakness/need – needs to let go of his need for revenge (and also theft and terrorism)
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants vengeance on John McClane for killing his brother
3. opponent – John McClane
4. plan – go through with the robbery, but also kill John McClane
5. battle – tries to shoot John out in the open after the hostage ordeal is over
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – Al shoots him to death

Argyle
1. weakness/need – needs to stop being so clueless about everything around him
1A. problem – he is stuck at Nakatomi Plaza and terrorists have taken over the building
2. desire – wants to get out of Nakatomi Plaza but there is no way out
3. opponent – Hans and terrorists
4. plan – none
5. battle – feels like a helpless victim
6. self-revelation – even though he’s not where the action is, he can still ram his car into theirs and punch them out
7. new equilibrium – he chauffeurs John and Holly out of the party, as originally planned

 

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Writing Challenge – Story #9 – the Bourne Ultimatum

Bourne
1. weakness/need – needs to accept responsibility for the decisions he’s made
1A. problem – has flashbacks of his Treadstone training, including being dunked in water
2. desire – wants to remember how he wound up as an assassin
3. opponent – Dr. Hirsch
4. plan – follow as many leads as possible until he gets to the truth
5. battle – he shows up to 415 71st (per Landy’s info) to ask Dr. Hirsch why he was chosen for the program
6. self-revelation – he remembers volunteering to become an assassin
7. new equilibrium – he’s no longer Jason Bourne, he was supposedly shot and fell into the East River and now has the opportunity to become David Webb or anyone else

Pamela Landy
1. weakness/need – needs to not trust spies
1A. problem – Bourne is tied to another high level operation and she wants to pick the right side
2. desire – get to the truth of what is going on in the government
3. opponent – Noah
4. plan – to work with Bourne to figure out what is going on in the government and why they are targeting him when he’s done nothing wrong
5. battle – chooses to send all the information Noah has on Blackbriar to authorities so that they know what really happens in the programs that they’ve funded and approved
6. self-revelation – she would rather commit career suicide than be a part of Blackbriar and what it does to both the operatives and the victims (assassination no longer requires approval from government)
7. new equilibrium – is helping the government investigation into Director Kramer, Noah Vosen, and Dr. Hirsch

Neal Daniels
1. weakness/need – needs to stop being involved in illegal government ops
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants information about the illegal acts to become public knowledge
3. opponent – Director Kramer
4. plan – give government secrets to the news and, if he gets caught, escape with his money
5. battle – the govt. gets hold of him and sends an assassin to kill him before he gets the chance to talk to Bourne or anyone else
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – dies when Desh ignites an explosive

Director Kramer (fake ally)
1. weakness/need – needs to value people over politics
1A. problem – Blackbriar has a leak
2. desire – to prevent information on his illegal Blackbriar operations from being leaked to anyone
3. opponent – Landy
4. plan – if Blackbriar goes south, he’ll blame Landy and start over
5. battle – has his minions prevent the information from getting out, but Landy gets a hold of them from Bourne and faxes them to the authorities
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – under investigation by CIA for authorizing the program, which in several cases may have even targeted U.S. citizens

Head of Operations, Noah Vosen (opponent)
1. weakness/need – needs to stop supporting government ops that break people in order to turn them into assassins and target U.S. citizens, without government authorization
1A. problem – Bourne is now after the government source who has info on Blackbriar
2. desire – to find the person who’s been leaking info to the press
3. opponent – Landy
4. plan – to contain the leak and hopefully get Bourne in the process
5. battle – is so obsessed with chasing Bourne that he fails to understand the trick that Bourne and Landy played on him to get the secret files on Blackbriar and send them out into the world
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – he needs to get himself a good lawyer

Reporter Simon Ross
1. weakness/need – needs to realize he’s in over his head
1A. problem – he’s tapped into a source at Blackbriar
2. desire – to uncover the truth about Blackbriar and Jason Bourne
3. opponent – Blackbriar
4. plan – to learn the secrets Blackbriar holds
5. battle – trust Bourne to save his life
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – death

Nicky Parsons (fake opponent)
1. weakness/need – needs to get out of the spy business
1A. problem –
2. desire – wants to help Bourne because she still has feelings for him
3. opponent – Noah
4. plan – to help Bourne and not get caught
5. battle – she must run for her life when Noah realizes she helped Bourne and sends Desh to kill her
6. self-revelation – she has to live on her own from now on
7. new equilibrium – she lives her life on the run

Dr. Albert Hirsch (opponent)
1. weakness/need – needs to acknowledge some responsibility for having broken people to turn them into assassins who would do anything to serve their country
1A. problem – Jason Bourne is on the loose and looking for him
2. desire – to continue turning volunteers into operatives using his experimental methods
3. opponent – Bourne
4. plan – sit and talk to Bourne until Noah’s people arrive to kill him
5. battle – tells Bourne he holds no guilt over breaking people to turn them into assassins because they volunteered for the program
6. self-revelation – none
7. new equilibrium – under investigation for working for Treadstone and Blackbriar

 

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